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I courted Death
in a burnt out pub
with faulty lights and dirt-cheap drinks;
She had tarred fingers
which danced hypnotically
around her hazy smeared glass.
Word round town was that she had the
Kiss of death
and a tongue as sharp as a scythe,
it was a challenge I couldn’t resist.

I seduced Death
bought her a drink or two
and with rum burning my heart
I stroked her arm,
(coffin cold)
and licked my lips like a predator
(a lamb in wolf’s clothing)
and when she grinned back,
I realised which of us was really prey.

I danced with Death
in a dark alley,
in an abandoned warehouse,
a trashed motel room;
it was fast and heady and yet -
the night lasted a lifetime,
a constant navy blanket
over the landscape spinning by
outside the broken windows and above
as a vaulted ceiling hanging
over the crumbling brick walls
(it was carnal and primal but
the night could never last a lifetime)

I fell in love with Death
as dawn light spilled across the black canvas,
smearing her in yellow and pink.
I finally saw her clearly
and she was beautiful,
but she never came back for me -
however much I begged down the phone,
however much I drank and swore and cursed,
her kiss lingering faintly on my lips.

(and I’m still waiting for Death
so we can dance again
in a night that lasts a lifetime.)
5/4/14
(what if Death wasn't a hooded man ghosting in and out all while lugging around a huge scythe?)
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ReconditeDevices Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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This is great!  Such a beautifully executed concept. You had me at "...in a burnt out pub" and was riveted 'til the end.  You set the scene so well, great opening hook.  Loved it!  Thumbs Up 
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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wow thank you :D :love:
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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sorry for such a late reply - I fractured my arm so typing has been difficult but thank you so much for such a lovely comment! I'm really touched that you like my idea :love:
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ReconditeDevices Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ouch!   :sling:   Hope you're okay.    I'm honored that you would make the effort under such circumstances.   

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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha thank you this is the first day I've been able to type a lot so I'm making the most of it! You're so sweet :love: Love the flowers haha! Lily Thank you 
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Neb-Storm Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
This was awesome!
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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Neb-Storm Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Your Welcome! :)
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shep4life Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A constant navy blanket 
Over the landscape spinning by 

Great concept...could have gone a million ways with this
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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :love:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student Writer
Wow. This is powerful. I love it. :faint::bow::clap::love:
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comatose-comet Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah thank you! :hug:
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